We appreciate this opportunity to contribute to the magazine article you are writing about Web Conferencing for Networking Voices. My specialty here at Forest Communication is conferencing services for North America.
Online meetings are becoming more frequent and more necessary; many companies find that such meetings save time and money. Participants can hold live, interactive meetings and share documents and presentations without ever leaving their offices or homes; therefore, Web and phone conferencing is simply more convenient then having to attend meeting in person. Nearly all providers of this convenient service offer a common set of user features that increase productivity and collaborative success, such as:
• Participant ID. This feature displays on the user’s screen the name of all attendees and indicates who is talking over the phone line.
• Power Points/Document Sharing. Presenters can display Web-based visuals and describe them by talking on the telephone.
• Polling/Surveys. A virtual " show of hands" can speed consensus and shorten a meeting. Because these conferencing polls are anonymous, they are less intimidating then those in live meetings.
• Whiteboard. Just as in physical meetings, a whiteboard is handy for jotting down key points and recording brain-storming ideas.
• Archive. If requested, all contents can be archived so that participants who could not join can catch up as their schedule permits.
Web conferencing eliminates the need for traveling to meetings which is especially effective for global teams and large groups. Please contact me at (671) 830- 8701 for a list of Web conferencing "Do’s and Don’ts". Thank you. References : You had some random sentence fragments, some punctuation, some spelling, some misuse of words- basically, proofreading. The beginning is incredibly awkward however, something I really couldn’t fix. It would have been much easier to know the topic, but I did the best I could. Good luck!
The part where is says, (We appreciate this opportunity, to contribute to the magazine article that you are writing, about Web Conferencing for Network Voices.), should have a comma after opportunity and a comma after writing. (That you are writing about Network Conferencing.), is not a complete sentence!
The part where it says, (Online meetings are becoming more frequent and more necessary.), is the way the sentence should be written. (And more necessary.) by itself is not a complete sentence!
The part where it says (Participants can hold live, interactive meetings and share documents and presentations, without ever leaving their offices or homes.), is the way that should be written. You should have a comma between presentations and without, instead of a period because (Without ever leaving their offices or homes.), is not a complete sentence!
Under where you have your features listed, I would put a Colon(:) after each feature and not a period (.)! Example Whiteboard: Not Whiteboard.
(Web conferencing eliminates the need for traveling to meetings, which is especially effective, for global teams and large groups.), is the way that should be written. (Which is especially effective for global teams and large groups.), is not a complete sentence. I hope that all makes sense to you and isn’t too confusing!
Other than that, I did not see anything else. It looks good! Good Luck with your paper. I hope this helps! References :
It’s too long
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My corrections are made below inside the paper.
We appreciate this opportunity to contribute to the magazine article you are writing about Web Conferencing for Networking Voices. My specialty here at Forest Communication is conferencing services for North America.
Online meetings are becoming more frequent and more necessary; many companies find that such meetings save time and money. Participants can hold live, interactive meetings and share documents and presentations without ever leaving their offices or homes; therefore, Web and phone conferencing is simply more convenient then having to attend meeting in person. Nearly all providers of this convenient service offer a common set of user features that increase productivity and collaborative success, such as:
• Participant ID. This feature displays on the user’s screen the name of all attendees and indicates who is talking over the phone line.
• Power Points/Document Sharing. Presenters can display Web-based visuals and describe them by talking on the telephone.
• Polling/Surveys. A virtual " show of hands" can speed consensus and shorten a meeting. Because these conferencing polls are anonymous, they are less intimidating then those in live meetings.
• Whiteboard. Just as in physical meetings, a whiteboard is handy for jotting down key points and recording brain-storming ideas.
• Archive. If requested, all contents can be archived so that participants who could not join can catch up as their schedule permits.
Web conferencing eliminates the need for traveling to meetings which is especially effective for global teams and large groups. Please contact me at (671) 830- 8701 for a list of Web conferencing "Do’s and Don’ts". Thank you.
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You had some random sentence fragments, some punctuation, some spelling, some misuse of words- basically, proofreading. The beginning is incredibly awkward however, something I really couldn’t fix. It would have been much easier to know the topic, but I did the best I could. Good luck!
Paragraph 2, put an and in between the first and second sentence.
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The part where is says, (We appreciate this opportunity, to contribute to the magazine article that you are writing, about Web Conferencing for Network Voices.), should have a comma after opportunity and a comma after writing. (That you are writing about Network Conferencing.), is not a complete sentence!
The part where it says, (Online meetings are becoming more frequent and more necessary.), is the way the sentence should be written. (And more necessary.) by itself is not a complete sentence!
The part where it says (Participants can hold live, interactive meetings and share documents and presentations, without ever leaving their offices or homes.), is the way that should be written. You should have a comma between presentations and without, instead of a period because (Without ever leaving their offices or homes.), is not a complete sentence!
Under where you have your features listed, I would put a Colon(:) after each feature and not a period (.)! Example Whiteboard: Not Whiteboard.
(Web conferencing eliminates the need for traveling to meetings, which is especially effective, for global teams and large groups.), is the way that should be written. (Which is especially effective for global teams and large groups.), is not a complete sentence. I hope that all makes sense to you and isn’t too confusing!
Other than that, I did not see anything else. It looks good! Good Luck with your paper. I hope this helps!
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